Literacy homework due Friday, 7th October
For homework this week, I would like you to post six super sentences containing suspense.
When writing your sentences, remember to include the following techniques used in class:
- Short sentences to build up tension
- Ellipsis (…) to create the ‘what happens next?’ moment
- SHOW how the character felt (His heart pounded, sweat poured from his face.)
- Similes
- Dramatic openers (At that moment.....)
- Use the senses to describe, particularly SOUNDS!
You may use the following short openers as a starting point:
- Dougal spotted
- Dougal was sleeping
- In the distance…
- Dougal turned around…
- Dougal opened the door
- Cautiously, Dougal crept inside
Alternatively, you may wish to create suspense sentences about a completely different adventure! I'm already looking forward to reading your work.
1.Tom eyes widened when he saw a stranger.
ReplyDelete2.Tom shuddered with relief ... and what happened next.
3.His heart was beating fast.
4.As white as a ghost.
5.He shot back across the road.
6.Tom could hear the floor boards creaking.
A super example of each type!
DeleteDougal saw a cave,She wanted to go inside.But she was to scard,frighten,petafired.
ReplyDeleteDougal was a sleep.And wore up frightened her heart racing as she looked up and the door slowly opening.
In the distansce ,there was a lot of fog and thunder.Dougal could just about see were she was going ,hungry and lonely.
Dougal turend around and saw a amazing and courlful door.
Dougal opened the door as it creeked opened anxiosly and there was a big tall massive...
Dougal crept inside the cave. On her tippy toes, and the floor boards were creaking.
Well planned and thought out sentences!
DeleteEMILY
ReplyDelete1. Lilly froze in horror.
2. Will she escape the terrifying, spooky, petrifying haunted house?
3.His teeth shattered he had to escape?
4.He leaped out of the window jumping as high as a frog.
5.Suddenly a frightening ghost slipped though a crack in the door.
6.Lilly crept cautiously in the haunted house and saw a massive python as scary a witch
Super suspense created!
DeleteDougal spotted a mouse.
ReplyDeleteDougal was sleeping when suddenly… he heard a bang!
In the distant he could see a shadow … He was petrified his heart was beating fast.
Dougal turned around he heard a screeching sound! What was it?
Dougal opened the door as quiet as a mouse.
Cautiously, Dougal crept inside the haunted house. He felt petrified! He could hear witches laughing , it was dark as night.
I really like your last sentence in particular, Rajan.
DeleteHANAAN
ReplyDeleteOnce it was a dark stormy night then I shivered terribly after I walked up the steep steps then gargantuently I screamed AHHHH!then I ran as fast as quick silver and viciously I broke the door then I said WOW! there was beautiful stuff every were so I tried to take all of the and put it all home then the ghosts came back and said"were's all our gold gone" so then the ghosts went to my ginormous house they searched the whole house but there wasnt any gold because I hid it very well so then the ghosts screamed and destroyed the whole house.
A well written paragraph about the picture Hanaan but you need to post it on the correct page!
DeleteArmaan
ReplyDeleteIn my blue dream jar you can find:
a colourful butterfly dancing around the flower
I saw a parrot swooping across my garden
I saw a white sea of doves near the beach
I saw a blue cloudy sky in my dreams
there was a shinny glowing stone in the river
and this all was a gift from santa
A well created dream jar but you need to make sure you post it on the correct page please, Armaan
DeleteThe owl hoots and the wolf howls
ReplyDeleteThe night is as black as coals
Suddenly, the bats fly towards...
the beaming light in the sky
Someone calling in the distance...
Time to get up dear, good morning
by Kashvi
You have tried really hard to use all the different type of sentences - well done!
Delete1. Little Tommy was in the Shard one night when suddenly all the lights went out…
ReplyDelete2. He saw a silhouette, he went to take a look but it had gone. Where did it go?
3. CRASH!!! The sound was earsplitting.
4. Little Tommy was so scared. His fingers were trembling so much it looked like he had frostbite.
5. There were two doors in the room, which one should he choose?
6. Nervously, he chose the left door and disappeared into darkness…
Well completed - I love the use of ear-splitting!
Delete1. Tim was as cold as an ice cream.
ReplyDelete2. He saw a very dark and horrible looking house in front of him.
3. Tim opened the door and he heard a laud creak.
4. He was so frighten, but decided to go inside.
5. Suddenly, he saw ghosts, bats and spiders crawling towards him.
6. As he walked further inside, the floor started to collapse,so he ran outside.
You have built up your suspense in so many way - great effort!
DeleteADITYA
ReplyDelete1. Dougal was in a terrifying garden.
2. Dougal took a step and annoys creaked from the bushes.
3. Dougal saw a big shadow gleaming through the window walking...and CRASH on the wall
4. He looked again and the shadow has disappeared .
5. At the moment he was shivering of the coldness.
6. All he could hear was foxes making there revolting noise.
You have tried all the different types of sentence which is great. Please make sure you read your sentences to check they make sense before publishing.
Delete1.Jeff heard a petrifying noise out side his window.
ReplyDelete2.Behind him, he heard a scary laugh.
3.He saw shadows in the darkness .
4.Jeff felt spikes like jagged daggers.
5. Glowing eyes staring at him whilst he shivered in his skin.
6.Suddenly!!!It was gone...
A great example of teach type. Please only use one ! at the end of a sentence.
Delete1.The door creaked as Jerry opened it.
ReplyDelete2.At that moment Ellie sniffed something suspicious.
3.Sofia rushed home cause something was following her .
4.The polar bear was still as a stone because he saw something moving
5.Emma paused to see what's in the cave , will she go in or not?
6.Lucy hid under the table as the wolf called
Nice and well explained sentences Dheeksha. Remember because is the whole word and not cause in your 3rd sentence.
DeleteGurjaipaul
ReplyDelete1.One spooky, scary,uncomfortable,dark and cold night..
2.I was very very...scared, frightened and cold
3.At that moment...I sensed a gloomy, disgusting thing called a slimy gloomy(sticky) glue
4.I was sweaty, when I saw a slimy tower with a rusty clock..
5.I really wanted to go in there, but I was in the middle of the night and I didn't know what will...
6. My mum was even looking for me, that I was safe
for now and...
I really like your power of 3 (even though you have 5 adjectives!) to add lots of description to the first sentence.
DeleteEva froze to hear a very strange hiss...
ReplyDeleteEva 's heart skipped a beat.
Eva followed the low hiss into the pitch-Black cellar!
Eva was full of courage.
Eva touched something long and curly...
Eva found a snake(King Cobra).
Eva glimpsed a rather sharp pencil...
Eva made it the sharpest thing ever!
Eva poked a horrible spider in the corner.
Eva aimed at the terrifying snake.
Eva was safe.
You have been practising using the short, punchy sentences that we gave you as a target in class - well done!
DeleteNithilan
ReplyDelete1. Steve`s fingers trembled in the tough,rough castle.
2. Trouble formed and got worse as Steve took the precious book.
3. Steve flicked the spider away which gave him the creeps.
4. Steve spotted a flicker.
5. Steve heard a cruel witch cackle.
6. Steve froze and turned around.
Dougal spotted a shadow moving in his room
ReplyDeleteDougal was sleeping in his bed,
In the distance he saw a big brave bear…
Dougal turned around shaking and shivering…
Dougal opened the door to escape but the door wouldn't open!
Cautiously, Dougal crept inside his cupboard to hide.