Literacy Homework due Friday, 30th September
Have a look at this boring list poem.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a parrot,
a butterfly,
the sea,
the sky,
a precious stone,
a gift.
How can you improve it? Maybe you could add some exciting adjectives (gargantuan, ferocious) or some powerful verbs (pounced, erupted). You could include some alliteration (the menacingmonster was munching his meaty meal) or a simile (its skin was a cold as ice, it crawled like a snail).
Write your own, improved version of the poem. I can't wait to see what you come up with!
In the blue dream jar you might find:
a parrot,
a butterfly,
the sea,
the sky,
a precious stone,
a gift.
How can you improve it? Maybe you could add some exciting adjectives (gargantuan, ferocious) or some powerful verbs (pounced, erupted). You could include some alliteration (the menacingmonster was munching his meaty meal) or a simile (its skin was a cold as ice, it crawled like a snail).
Write your own, improved version of the poem. I can't wait to see what you come up with!
ADITYA
ReplyDeletea peaceful parrot singing a tune gracefully as an angel,
a beautiful butterfly sitting on a branch as quite as a mouse,
the blue sea washing against the sand,
the bright,blue sky shining on the smooth ground,
a small precious stone relaxing on the seashore
a giant gift was laying on the corner of the room.
In a blue dream jar you might find :
ReplyDeleterainbow parrot flying to to blue sky ,
magnificent butterfly resting on top of the blue sea,
as well as precious, beautiful stone shinning like gold
being a brilliant present for my Mum.
A large and colourful parrot is flying like wind,
ReplyDeleteA tiny and delicate butterfly is floating like a feather,
The greenish blue sea is shiny and sparkling,
The light blue sky is clear and bright,
A solid, glittering and precious stone is like a gift from Mother Nature.
By Kashvi
Be a beautiful butterfly and spread your wings, loveing and free. Bright and colourful for the world to see.
ReplyDeleteSome can fly higher than others, but each one files the best.
Why compare one to another?
Each one is special.
Each one is different.
Each one is beautiful.
In the blue dream jar you might find :
A beautiful butterfly beginning to open its wings, beautiful butterfly fluttering by, beautiful butterfly, up in the sky, beautiful butterfly, lovely to see, please pretty butterfly by me.
in the blue dream jar you might find: a gleaming blue parrot flying across the sensationally bright sky,a set of diamonds sparkling in the moonlight, the sea also joined in the party, as it crashed and splashed like a dolphin.Cutting the air like a hot knife through butter,a scintillating blue jet darting through the air,the sky lifted with sadness as it rained down tears flooding the arid town below giving it supplies and life.
ReplyDeleteEmily
ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream jar you might find:
The sky is as blue as the sea,
the gargantuan sea scattering ferociously across the beach,
a precious stone as glamourous as a star,
a petrifying parrot perching stiffly on a tree branch,
a dancing butterfly fluttering faboulously,
a speacial gift as colourful as a flower.
In the blue dream jar you can find:
ReplyDeleteA prickly parrot sitting on a oak tree,
a bizzar looking butterfly fluttering its wings,
the shinning sea of golden flowers,
the sun-setting sky,
as sparkling precious stone,
a Gods gift.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea scarlet parrot that squawks very loud
a butterfly that flutters fast and proud
a glittering sea filled with dolphins and sharks
a bright blue sky that will soon turn dark
an extraordinary emerald dazzling green
a dinosaur gift for Tom the best I have seen
Armaan
ReplyDeleteIn my blue dream jar you can find:
a colourful butterfly dancing around the flower
I saw a parrot swooping across my garden
I saw a white sea of doves near the beach
I saw a blue cloudy sky in my dreams
there was a shinny glowing stone in the river
and this all was a gift from santa
Armaan
ReplyDeleteIn my blue dream jar you can find:
a colourful butterfly fluttering around my trampoline
there is a red parrot swooping passed my garden
I could see a white see of doves near the beach
there was a blue cloudy sky in my dreams
there was a shinny, glowing, precious stone hanging from my pocket
Santa gave us all a glamorous gift
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDelete- a colorful parrot who is sitting on a tree,
- a fluttering butterfly who is flying around,
- a beautiful smelling flower who is growing in the grass,
- the shining sun, which is sunrising,
- a rainbow unicorn who is flying around the sky,
- an invisible lizard, who is walking along the palm.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeletea powerful parrot walking on a tree,
a colourful butterfly as colourful as a rainbow,
the wide sea ,
the bright sky ,
the glittering precious stone from the museum,
a gift very beautiful with just a touch of magic .
27\9\2016
ReplyDeleteMina
In the blue dream jar you might find:
A peaceful parrot was flying as gracefully as a bird,
A beautiful butterfly fluttering its wings like a fish’s fin,
The storming sea was roaring like an angry lion,
The sparkling sky was as shiny as a shooting star,
A perfect precious stone broke into pieces,
A great gift of life as beautiful as cosmos
In the blue dream jar you can find
ReplyDeleteA coularful parrot flying to his home
A preshos buterfly flaping his wings
A big blue sea at the beach
A big blue sky as still as a stone
A big gift wayting to bee unrapt
A preshos stone on top of a golden ring
By Denis
In the blue dream jar you can find:
ReplyDeleteA prickly parrot sitting on a oak tree,
a bizzar looking butterfly fluttering its wings,
the shinning sea of golden flowers,
the sun - setting sky,
as sparkling precious stone,
a Gods gift.
In the blue dream jar,you can find:a pretty parrot perched on a tree,
ReplyDeletea beautiful butterfly as light as a petal ,
a glimmering sea as blue as a blue-whale,
a glamorous sky as cool as a sports car,
a precious stone as sparkly as gold,
a incredible gift as pure as sun-light.
In the blue dream jar you can find:
ReplyDeleteA gleaming parrot,
A beautiful blue butterfly,
The wavy sea,
The blue remarkable sky,
A precious stone as hard as rock,
A gods gift
Nithilan -
ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream jar you will find :
A precious parrot in the calming breeze,
a beautiful butterfly in the gleaming sky,
the rolling sea filled with fishes and people,
the spectacular sky brightening every morning,
a precious stone as smooth as silk,
a great gift from god
In the blue dream jar you can find:
ReplyDeleteA purple parrot flying fast as a plane
A caterpillar slowly turning into a beautiful butterfly
The sea was snoring like a old man
The sky was shining brightly
A lonely precious stone in the sea
A gift, I didn't know about
Gurjaipaul
ReplyDeleteIn the blue dream jar you can find:
A small parrot flying over a tree,
A beautiful butterfly flying over the flower
The wonderful sea is the place to relax ,
The pretty sky has lots of clouds,
A precious crystal stone lying on the playground,
A secret gift wrapped on the table.
In the blue dream jar you might find:
ReplyDeleteA powerful parrot as colourful as the rainbow,
A beautiful butterfly as orange as a tiger,
The super sea as blue as the dragonfly's coated stones,
The shinnig sky as shiny as the bright sun,
A precious stone as glossy as gold,
A gifty gify as pouncy as a trampoline.